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    dots Submission Name: Aspiration #2dots

    Author: Syndl
    ASL Info:    28/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 56/55/19
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAspiration #2dots

    Would that I could be silent.
    To neither speak nor shout.
    To enjoy the presence of mind
    And contemplate all of my thoughts
    that more often are overlooked in haste and frivolity.
    To never overstep my boundaries with words and sly remarks.
    To never lash out with anger biting with my temper.
    And to learn to listen wholly, with care and compassion.
    Would that I could be silent.

    Submitted on 2004-05-25 06:07:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      okay... i AM left wondering... not an... sorry for the confusion

    it's telling me i can't post until i make this longer..... argh.....

    | Posted on 2004-05-25 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]
      i thoroughly enjoy the concept, but an left slightly wondering what aspiration number one is.

    it reminds me of desiderata, and that, my darling, is one of the best compliments i could EVER give you, considering i scrawled pieces of that on one of my walls in permanent marker...

    it flows very smoothly, and the repetition, at the beginning and the end makes for a solid, complete piece of writing. good work!
    | Posted on 2004-05-25 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]

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