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    Author: nikkisan158
    ASL Info:    16/f/IN
    Elite Ratio:    1.13 - 3/16/22
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    As are bodies craved each other more a more as the time went on. I realized the more he held me close the more, I wanted to feel his body heat against my skin. The way he held me in the room was as passionate as a rose pedals falling on a bed. Then he held me as close as our bodies could go. He started to kiss me passionately down my neck. I slowly pulled off his shirt. His body was curved in place it should be! The passion that came over me was more of a craving then as passion. Then he came close to my face a came in slowly a kissed me softly on the lips. I slowly pulled my skirt off. He strode there silently looking at me with a glaze in his eyes. Oh baby boy why don’t you just come a get me! Oh (I never that I was going to say that to him) I though that you wouldn’t want me to come a get you baby girl! Well I told you to come a get me so come on. But maybe we should what. The next thing I knew I was doing was taking off al his cloths. We you strode there staring at him with a happy look on your face. I was amazed at the way he stared at me.


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