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    dots Submission Name: My Angeldots

    Author: newguy414
    ASL Info:    15/M/Mt. Elgin, Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/2/1
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is my first poem I ever wrote, I wrote it for my girlfriend Shelby.

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    dotsMy Angeldots

    The most beautiful person I ever met
    Walked into my life
    And humbled my lonely soul.
    She is an image straight from Heaven
    With sun shining on her face
    And wind whipping her chocolatey hair.
    The aroma she brings is just as lovely
    Carrying the cleanliness
    From her newest flowery shampoos.
    My arms feel as if I'm holding
    The finest silk of all
    Smooth and soft daring to be touched.
    My tongue enters the threshold of her mouth
    Combining with a sweetness
    That can only be reached at the height of love
    I have no plans of leaving her side
    Forever we shall stay
    Riding the ripples of life together.

    Submitted on 2006-10-06 20:06:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hey, i also came here on recommendaition of chaoticdisaster and i must say, this poem is excellent. It contains and relies on imagery but thats what makes it powerful. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-10-07 00:00:00 | by riki_nl | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely newguy, me name's Mike, I'm a friend of Chaoticdisaster and he recommended you for a read. I must say it's very good. The imagery is great, as most poems are but it has a much deeper meaning then most love poems I read nowadays. nice job.
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by mikepyro7 | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




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