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    dots Submission Name: Feather Pillowdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 997
    Class/Type: Story/Passion
    Total Views: 875
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    Bytes: 5718



    Description:
       A bit graphic...if you are offended by things of a sexual nature, don't read any further...

    I can't srite poetry anymore, and I have to write something.


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    dotsFeather Pillowdots
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    "When was the first time that you realized you were attracted to me?" Trinity asked, looking over at Drew. His face was briefly illuminated by the headlights of an oncoming car. Then the car passed, and his face was cloaked in shadows once more. He glanced over, a devious smile playing at the corner of his lips.
    "You want the truth?" he asked, a note of amusement in his voice. Trinity pursed her lips, and smiled in uncertainty.
    "Yeah, I want the truth," she said, cautiously, "Is it that bad?" Drew chuckled, his attention still focused on the road. Trinity fidgeted nervously, her hands occupied by the stuffed dolphin that Drew had won her at the amusement park. He looked over, laughed at the expression on her face, took her left hand, and placed a kiss on her fingers.
    "The night you came in to Hardees, and you were wearing those leather pants," he replied, still holding on to her fingers. Trinity jerked her hand away and dissolved into laughter. Drew looked at her, amused, but slightly puzzled.
    "I fucking knew it!" Trinity exclaimed. "It was my ass, wasn't it?" It was Drew's turn to laugh.
    "I can't deny it," he said, "It is one sexy ass." With that, he reached over, and gave her leg a squeeze. Trinity laughed harder, and swatted at his hand.
    "I don't know what to do with you," she said. Drew grinned, his thoughts obviously taking the wrong turn.
    "I know lots of things you could do with me," he chuckled. Trinity shook her head.
    "You have a very dirty mind," she said, moving closer to him in the tiny cab of his truck. Drew grinned, wrapped his right arm around her waist, and pulled her even closer. One of her hands came to rest dangerously high on his leg.
    "You better drive faster," she whispered into his ear, "Because we only have so much time until my mom gets home. Drew's smile grew even wider, and the truck surged forward. Fifteen minutes later, they had reached their destination.
    By the time that they got to Trinity's bedroom, their shoes were off, and Drew was in the process of removing Trinity's shirt. He pulled it over her head, and began to kiss her. As his fingers worked on the clasps of her bra, she unbuckled his belt, and pulled the end of his shirt out of his pants. Her fingers began the slow process of unbuttoning his shirt, and he ran his hands up and down her back. Then he finished unclasping her bra, and tossed it aside. She got the last button on his shirt, and knelt down. She looked up at him slyly. He grinned down at her. She took her fingers, and slowly traced the line of hair that started at his belly button, and disappeared underneath the top of his pants. Then, she looked up at him again. He stared down at her, eager to see what she would do next. She grinned, moistened her lips, and looked up at Drew once more from underneath her eyelashes. He watched her lips part, and shuddered as she slowly traced a line from where his skin met his pants to his belly button with her clever, pink tongue. Then her hands slowly unbuttoned his jeans while she placed a very soft kiss on his stomach.
    Drew grabbed Trinity's arms, and pulled her back up to where she was face to face with him. His hand slowly made its way around her head, to the nape of her neck, where he tangled his fingers in her hair, and yanked her head back. She gasped, and her eyes met his, almost primal in their hunger. He took possession of her waiting mouth while her hands pushed his jeans to the floor.
    Moments later, they were both completely naked. Drew gently laid Trinity down on the bed, pausing to take in every detail of her body. Neither of them had seen the other entirely without clothing before. Drew trailed kisses down Trinity's entire body before settling between her thighs. He worked his magic on her body, and she pulled him to her to return the favor. Her hands teased and stroked, intent on giving him as much pleasure as she could, despite the fact that they both knew it could go no farther than this. Their mouths teased one another, their hands roamed and explored. Just when she thought she couldn't take any more, Trinity felt Drew's heartbeat quicken, and felt his sharp intake of breath. A warm, sticky, wetness settled on her legs, and she smiled to herself.
    When the two lovers had caught their breath, Trinity inspected the sheets that adorned her bed. There was no avoiding it, they would have to be changed. She retrieved sheets from her sister's room. She sat down on her bed, still nude, and dumped one of her pillows out of its pillowcase. The knot that had been tied in the end of it came undone, and a rather large pile of feathers fell onto the bed. Trinity looked at the feathers that were flying up around her head in dismay, then looked up at Drew.
    Drew looked down at Trinity, her naked body covered in feathers. They sat this way for a few moments, then Drew began to laugh. He took Trinity's hands in his own, and pulled her to her feet. Feathers flew everywhere, and stuck to both their bodies. He pulled her close to him, the heat from her body fending off the chill from the air conditioner. He wrapped his arms around her, and kissed the tip of her nose.
    "I love you, goofy-ass," he said, looking down into her expressive blue eyes. She favored him with a smile that served to take his breath away.
    "I love you, too," she said, "Now what are we going to do about all these feathers?"




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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree that you might do well writing romance if you have the passion for it. I had to smile about the hair pulling and the fact that y poem describes the same (although you wrote this before reading it) This is sexy without being lude or overly graphic...although romance novels have gone more so than some might think these days.
    My favorite thing about this is that you give the feeling tht the lovers enjoy each other and have fun together but jet they respect boundries that were obviously set in the relationship.

    The ending got a bigg warm fuzzy.

    jan
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      This is indeed very graphic and at the same time quite elusive. While it leaves no doubt as what you're describing it also never mentions it explicitly. Very nice. You would do well writing romance novels. I loved the ending. Both still naked with mom on the way home and worried about feathers. Clothes first feathers later, a lesson hard learned, but thats the young and in love for ya :)

    owlman
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by owlman23 | [ Reply to This ]


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