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    dots Submission Name: Broken Heavendots
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    Author: Azrielle_Lotus
    ASL Info:    16/female/florida
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 590
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    Description:
       This was written when my sate of euphoria was shattered.


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    dotsBroken Heavendots
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    Blow out the candles flame.
    Evaporate the water in the sea.
    I will never be perfect in your eyes.
    Why do I hate the thought of me?
    Break all mirrors that say only truth.
    Burn notes full of emotion.
    Paralyze yourself from all feeling.
    Ask for the gift of becoming numb.
    I am tired of feeling the pain.
    Am I allowed to be sick of being shunned?
    Why does being alone suffocate?
    The act of no air has begun.
    Choking, gagging, all of the above.
    A ringing in the ears.
    You're dizzy and feeling faint.
    Now you have no more fears.
    Kill the memories that once made you smile.
    Chop down the trees you've grown.
    When does this cycle end?
    Fall away from all you've known.




    Submitted on 2006-10-08 13:07:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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