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    dots Submission Name: fragile memoriesdots

    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       i had a moment today and it made me feel wired

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    dotsfragile memoriesdots

    staring at the clock.
    times ticking away, as allways
    a slight distint feeling of
    consent. that im wasting away here in my seat.

    looking at old pictures of you.
    wishing you were
    here. "love" or "life" which one is it
    i dont understand or am i not ment to understand

    looking at the clock.
    as the moments slip
    away. remembering when i used to do this with you
    a cold tear slides down my cheak
    ice cold it strikes.

    you realy are never comming back....

    Submitted on 2006-10-08 16:17:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    This really is an incredibly sad write
    I can feel the sadness you felt writing this and the last 2 lines were so strong that I got tears in my eyes reading this
    I have a funny feeling this is a deep personal poem
    More then some may realize it is
    Excellent Job
    You should be very proud of this one
    The emotion level is off the charts
    God Bless
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh Sad. Very sad

    I like this a lot.
    I wish I couldn't relate, but of course... I can.
    But hey, on the bright side, at least things like that inspire wonderful poetry.

    If I was you, I wouldn't change anything about this (aside from a few spelling errors, but that's not important).

    Very nicely done
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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