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    dots Submission Name: Not Anymoredots
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    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 689
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    Description:
       not everyone in the world can give you the happiness you expect from them.after seeing the truth, it was not hatred that i felt.it was kind of worse in a way.it was apathetic boredom.


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    dotsNot Anymoredots
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    i used to sit around and wonder
    when you'd approach me with your charm
    now i walk away from your arms
    when you finally opened your heart

    i thought you were the one
    who would pick me from the ground
    and piece me back together
    without a single sigh

    but you proved who you are
    as i gazed into your life
    your soothing lullaby of words
    no longer kissed me goodnight

    my gratitude goes out to you
    when you showed me who you truly are
    i am not fooled anymore
    thank god, before i hit the ground again.




    Submitted on 2006-10-08 20:18:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice! I love it so much!

    <3
    *randa*
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by Randa04 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a bit iffy on this I liked it cos I can really relate to it, but on the other it didn't fit well together and not being a stickler but it is wonder not wander

    Anyway as I said I can totally relate, I used to have this boyfriend who I thought was really cool and could introduce me to the right people and make me into what I wanted to be. It wasn't until two months into the relationship that I realised what a complete dick head he was and was able to f*** him off.

    Anyway keep up the good work and i'll go now and review some of your work cos god knows i am bored today. And could you please review some of my work, it would be greatly appreciated.

    babytink :)
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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