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    dots Submission Name: To The Nightdots
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    Author: Liv2LoveThePain
    ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527/1515/256
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I just want my funeral to be dark party.


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    dotsTo The Nightdots
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    Break out the leather.
    Give in to glass.
    Turn up the volume.
    Throw all your class
    to the night.

    Stand on my casket.
    Swallow some pills.
    Dance like you mean it.
    Hand what you kill
    to the night.

    Dress up in feathers.
    Dress up in lace.
    Bask in the evening,
    painting your face
    to the night.

    Put on that top hat,
    wings, gloves, and all.
    Scream 'til your lungs hurt.
    Jump 'til you fall
    to the night.

    When the sun rises,
    rinse out your hair.
    Act like you never
    gave yourself there
    to the night.




    Submitted on 2006-10-09 01:24:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This reminded me of the film "Eyes Wide Shut".
    Enough said.
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]
      lol - I enjoyed that one. I could imagine all those scens in my head, and maybe I'm just twisted, but it kind of made me laugh in a morbid way *snicker* I liked the different feel of this one - Death as a celebration instead of a devestation. Great work!

    ~Mandi Gayle~
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm I'm listening to AIC, "Rain when I die" not too surpriseingly it fit! Not to piss you off, but I wont dance on your grave or jumping around having a good time. Sorry, I'd want to, in memory of you, cause that's what you'd want, but I wouldn't be able to bring myself to it! It's ok you can burn my grave when I die! Than you'll have reason for jumping and screaming, and having a good ole time! Even thouhg I'm listening to AIC, it's making me think of the "seize the day"video by A7X; which I would have done a much better job at, i thinmk the video pretty much sux! But yeah, with him pulling off a guitar solo on the grave, yeah. Oh, I've given you 5 's on verything all night! I just can't help it, theere's nothing higher!
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there! isn't it funny how people get all emotional about death.. I feel like hey have a party too cause all the work just stopped and its relaxation time!!! great write...

    penny
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      It's nice to see someone celebrating one's life at a funeral. This wasn't so depressing, like so many other "death" pieces are. Oh my gosh, you pulled off an 'upper' about a funeral!!!!! This had an entertaining feel to it and I so want to be a part of this party too....but I can wait for awhile.
    Nice job with this!

    Candi
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      I bet this was fun to write? It sounds like a party I would like to attend;)
    Great poem!!!!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      oh i love this poem its a nice getaway from the normal funeral poems of grief and pain.
    a great way to see ur funeral and itsa fav.
    i'll comment more wen i have more time just coz...im in a rush rite now..but lovely poem!!!
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by _Dancing_Alone_ | [ Reply to This ]
      you know i just realixed (yes i just spelled reliaze with an x and no its not because i dont know how to spell it i made a mistake and i am too lazy to go back and correct it but apparently not too lazy to ramble on about it for four to five lines, i am one complicated individual), that you are one dark person.

    Hahahahhahahahahahahahahahahahahaah
    ha..hahaha.haha.haaaa

    Now where was i yes thats right nicely done, it would be really cool to have your funeral (God forbid you die) in a graveyard at midnight and everyone creepily dressed dancing to MyChemicalRomance and just like "Helena" you rise up that would be so wicked. I love coffee.

    Hahahaha,
    Jay.

    P.S. Ha
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Makes me want to party. Very wicked and entrancing. I am so going to your funeral.

    Dress up in feathers.
    Dress up in lace.
    Bask in the evening,
    painting your face
    to the night.

    The painting your face to the night, it sounds odd. Maybe you could find something better to substitute. Anyway, have a great day!
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Areinaka | [ Reply to This ]
      the reminds me of when we used to skate at night when the life you live in the night belongs and stays at that time when the nights over so is that life for now and you pretent nothing happend just like the rest of life and i liked the way you pointed that out in such a way there was one thing that caught me and made this peice perfect...

    should i tell what it was?!?!? yer why not :P

    Put on that top hat,
    wings, gloves, and all.
    Scream 'til your lungs hurt.
    Jump 'til you fall
    to the night.

    this proves to me that is that this life is the true person comming out or its the fake one coving their ways with beign able to
    "Put on that top hat,
    wings, gloves, and all."

    i think its cool imA be reading some more keep it up

    Rak
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh yeah, this definetly reminds me of night party debauchery and vice. Night is a trickster queen isn't she. Makes you do all kinds of things a daylight wouldn't. I don't know if there was a darker idea behind the motive of night but this is how I imagined it out of the personal experience. I loved the rhyme. Great poem :-)
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Please die soon. Your funeral sounds like so much fun! My Grandad did something similar - no funeral service, just a jazz party. Good times. Anyho, your poem was great - simple, but hectic and hedonistic and lurvely to read. Abit of sacrifice in there too - 'Hand what you kill
    to the night.'? Tres gothique. And a fantastic finale - 'When the sun rises,
    rinse out your hair.
    Act like you never
    gave yourself there'
    - the perfect end to debauchery. Look forward to more.

    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Von Django | [ Reply to This ]


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