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    dots Submission Name: The Lullabies We Used to Heardots
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    Author: was_i_ever_real
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 183/69/42
    Words: 378
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe Lullabies We Used to Heardots
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    The lullabies we used to hear at night have all been lost, replaced with infomercials and sirens...which comfort us more than the lullabies ever did. Sleep is a foreign word, so we spend the hours walking the streets in search of company. Most places are closed, at least most nice places, but if we spot a neon light, we're in luck.
    NEON LIGHTING IS THE DEFINITION OF AN ALL NIGHT ESTABLISHMENT.
    All night establishments usually entail hours of alcohol consumption and shooting pool with Frank-the-plumber and Mark-the-divorcee until we're too drunk to remember whether we're solids or stripes. We'll stumble to the bar, order another drink, and look around for that girl named Candy or Sugar.
    Home is always so cold, but Sugar-Candy will keep us warm, we know. We get that same empty feeling we had last night. We'll wake up in the morning with the worst hangover in our life and an empty bed (Candy-Sugar left sometime in the night) and we'll stumble to the refrigerator for another beer and swear we'll never drink again.

    We always break our promises.

    We're as predictable as night and day, and tonight, we'll flip through the channels and try to drown out the never ending sirens (so many sirens it's a wonder anyone's left alive in this city). Then we'll look around at the stacked pizza boxes and chinese food containers, and watch the cockroaches scurry across the floor, and hear the liquid drip into the pot we have next to the bed, (the ceiling always leaks when Mr. Johnson flushes his toilet) and we'll realize how lonely we are.

    We'll put our pleather jacket on and walk out the door, the T.V. still droning on about a something-or-other product. We'll find our way to the bar, to Frank and Mark and Candy or Sugar...we've become her regular.

    We'll drink, we'll play, we'll laugh, we'll forget how bad life is. But then the day comes again, and when the neon lights go off and Al closes the bar...
    reality comes rushing back.
    And life,
    it still sucks.




    Submitted on 2006-10-09 12:26:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Alcholism, not the point I dragged away, but monotony and detachment.

    Society in general, wouldn't you agree?

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-12-11 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this one, I like how you described how alcoholism can be and how we break every promise we make to ourselfs. My sister died of alcoholism, I watched her get unhealtier every single day and I remember saying those last words to her that I loved her. I wished that she could have had the strong will power with her, yet she didn't. It goes to show you that some addicts can survive before it is to late, others will just allow their addiction to kill them off.

    As for this write I did like how honest it was, because that is what alcoholism is all about for that brief moment when you are drunk you can forget everything, but then you will wake up in the morning hang over and all, and notice that those problems that you hide from so hard, are still there. It's kind of sad. And it's a difficult habit. Thank you for the write, it's going to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      Overall, great peice. Shattered just enough to keep it interesting, but not too random as too lose the reader. The whole bar scene is an all too familiar one for most people and I love how you come back to it in the end, nice come around. You penpoint the lives of so many perfectly, considering alcoholism is such a widespread epidemic. Not that I don't drink a little with my friends every now and again, but I don't let it control my life. Nice ending, I liked the last two lines. It really summed up the whole peice. Thanks for the read, PEACE.
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]



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