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    dots Submission Name: Ice And Bonesdots

    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 803
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 462

       I wrote this when I was left alone again
    hope you all like

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    dotsIce And Bonesdots

    Oh unpure heart of this wandering corpse
    So bitter and cold
    Still beats on for you

    My ice covered flesh
    Nothingness inside
    Longs for the life bringing touch of a goddess

    I am the discarded one from the world
    And will eventually become
    The remains within the coffin of cold and frost

    Now as I wither to ashes
    I still wait for her
    Please bring me divine salvation

    Submitted on 2006-10-09 13:49:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the dark cold reality of this....very good imagery as well and i love that pic!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      i see you quite a bit, you have almost entirely overtaken the first page of elite posts....

    another success

    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was really good! Bravo!
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by mary74 | [ Reply to This ]

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