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    dots Submission Name: Ice And Bonesdots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 841
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 462



    Description:
       I wrote this when I was left alone again
    hope you all like


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    dotsIce And Bonesdots
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    Oh unpure heart of this wandering corpse
    So bitter and cold
    Still beats on for you

    My ice covered flesh
    Nothingness inside
    Longs for the life bringing touch of a goddess

    I am the discarded one from the world
    And will eventually become
    The remains within the coffin of cold and frost

    Now as I wither to ashes
    I still wait for her
    Please bring me divine salvation




    Submitted on 2006-10-09 13:49:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like the dark cold reality of this....very good imagery as well and i love that pic!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      i see you quite a bit, you have almost entirely overtaken the first page of elite posts....

    another success

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was really good! Bravo!
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by mary74 | [ Reply to This ]


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