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    dots Submission Name: 70 Word Short Story "Third Period"dots
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    Author: Pietro
    ASL Info:    30/m/cebu
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 298/175/36
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Story/Nature
    Total Views: 876
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I wrote this just now- a product of insomnia is all. its a tribute to one of my all time favorite comic strips. at least i think it is. hope you enjoy it as much as i enjoyed writing it.


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    dots70 Word Short Story "Third Period"dots
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    He rode atop a humpback- there were many surrounding him. Calvin clutched at the great cetacean and asked, “What do you dream of?”

    “I dream of breaching the stratosphere… and flipping stardust with my tail,” the humpback said. “What do you dream of?”

    “I always dream that I am dreaming…” said Calvin “and I wake during the best parts.”

    A ringing could be heard, shattering glaciers. Third period was over.




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      My first impressions were the images that grabbed me the most--a humpback "flipping stardust"--that's so cool haha.

    I love Calvin and Hobbes too, although I've only ever read that comic strip in our national rag... but still, I found this story appealing from the get-go because of that.

    This, to me, is the art of daydreaming... caught in that place where ideas and inspiration come from, where anything is possible... and you imparted that perfectly to me.

    "Shattering glaciers" ...yea, fully, haha... evil bells.

    Overall, some really cosmic images... and very philosophic too ie "“I always dream that I am dreaming…” reminiscent of Confucianism... you know that dreaming butterfly proverb? Yea, that one.

    Awesome stuff.
    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-11-12 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello Pietro!

    I am in love with this line:

    “I always dream that I am dreaming…” said Calvin “and I wake during the best parts.”

    Yep, I love it. And well this is very well written (as with the other pieces of yours I read), I find it also to be somewhat lackluster in comparison. Though, it is a rather fun piece, and yah know, I do enjoy it. I have no complaint, though feel free to have one with the lameness of this comment... lol

    Justin
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]
      He rode atop a humpback- there were many surrounding him. Calvin clutched at the great cetacean and said, “What do you dream of?”

    “I dream of breaching the stratosphere… and flipping stardust with my tail,” the humpback said. “What do you dream of?”

    “I always dream that I am dreaming…” said Calvin “and I wake during the best parts.”

    A ringing could be heard, shattering glaciers. Third period was over.


    So, what was Hobbes doing? I suppose if there was ever a strip that captured the carefree lunacy of childhood without the introspective melancholy of "Peanuts," it would have to be "Calvin and Hobbes." This should have been formatted as thought balloons in linear panels with the appropriate illustrations for maximum impact. As a vignette, it's perfect. As an observation of the soulless nature of skill in the writing process, it's priceless. Writing should always be done while dreaming.

    Nicely done, btw.
    Take care.
    Bill.


    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      ah... whalerider... dreamtrekker...
    get back to the real world... the teacher may be boring and the future unclear. But the future is there to live and yesterday cannot be undone.
    hahahaha... Good stuff! Good Stuff!
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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