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    dots Submission Name: Excuse Me, Pleasedots
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    Author: disturbed420
    ASL Info:    20/f/wpg
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 36/35/15
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 987
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 415



    Description:
       Nothing spectacular... just an experiment. I don't think it worked out too well, but you tell me.


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    dotsExcuse Me, Pleasedots
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    You took my heart, made it whole.
    Now it's just a gaping hole.

    Excuse me while I cry...

    You led me down a path, sure of the way.
    Now I'm just lost, looking for a way.

    Excuse me while I run away...

    You took me into your arms, for comfort.
    Now this razorblade is my only comfort.

    Excuse me while I fall apart...




    Submitted on 2006-10-09 16:14:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      different ideas being represented through the same sounds/words.
    in that sense.. this is really cool.
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]
      i didn't really care for the word repition. but i guess if it was read write then it would sound okay.
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by the nerdbomb | [ Reply to This ]


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