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    dots Submission Name: Gone And Forgottendots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 746



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       I Wrote This ABout My Father Who Spends All His Time On The Internet.......


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    dotsGone And Forgottendots
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    At night before I go to sleep
    I wipe the tears from my eyes
    I hear them screaming for no reason
    I see the pain in my motherís eyes
    The tears running down her cheek
    She always kisses me before I fall asleep
    My dad never bothers to even say goodnight
    How can something so small ruin so many lives
    It causes pain it causes hate it makes my mother cry
    If only he could realise how much I need him in my life
    But ever hour he spends on that thing
    It feels like im not only losing a father but also a friend
    He doesnít know what goes on in my life
    And I donít think he cares
    Someday everything will change
    Because I will no longer be there




    Submitted on 2006-10-09 16:41:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey,
    i like this one a lot... i can kinda connect.. my dad and i dont talk much, the last time we really had a conversation was about a year ago, and i still live in the same house. mostly i just catch sh** b/c i forget to do something or another, and he doesnt ever congratulate me for anything, the most he says is "good"
    definately adding this one to my favs list.
    thanks for the poem, its great.
    Guermo
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]
      cool poem but dont do anything stupid because it feels as if you have alot of sadness because of this need anyone to talk to you can talk to me i love to talk because i get those times where i feel to give up to but i keep going and so should you
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by Cara R.D | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this. That is the worst thing about computers, some people get so overinvolved with them they stop living real life and only live in the net~one day he WILL see, it only takes time, but have faith in that~good job~keep up the excellent work! :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]


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