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    dots Submission Name: Justin2dots
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    Author: Gothic Misery
    ASL Info:    25/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    0.44 - 90/39/32
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 651
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsJustin2dots
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    For the first time I see a light in a shallow hole
    Different colors weaving in and out
    For the first time I see a shade of blue and yellow
    And although my soul has forgotten these colors I accept it
    For the first time I welcome it
    A smile on my face, and a gleam in my eye
    For the first time I sleep at night
    I see a hope for a purpose that wasn't there before
    For the first time I am not alone
    I'll hold on to this feeling and never wish it away
    For the first time I try not to hate
    You ease my pain and give me sense of peace
    For the first time I am forgiven
    Your young heart is not afraid
    For the first time I feel like I'm needed
    I'll try my best to never hurt you, though, it's all I'm good at
    For the first time I see you love me
    And for the first time I love you too




    Submitted on 2006-10-09 22:47:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      first love?

    nicely written, i like your style...keep it up

    you have an interesting way opf putting things that sort of grabs your reader...
    i look forward to reading more from you soon...

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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