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    dots Submission Name: Passion Personifieddots
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    Author: foxy lee
    ASL Info:    20 f/CT/SA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 27/23/10
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 567
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    Bytes: 519



    Description:
       this is about lust vs love


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    dotsPassion Personifieddots
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    This is what fantasies are made of
    interruption of the flow
    of a heartbeat tryst
    writhing in deceit
    in a blanket of charms
    caught in the middle
    of a place made for two
    pulling this way and that
    in a starry-eyed hue
    rushing for love,
    thirsting for pain
    a lick of the lips
    when the pleasure's ungained
    searching for serenity
    longing for bliss
    wanting less and more
    fingertips
    touch
    kiss...




    Submitted on 2006-10-10 03:03:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      taste good, i really like ur style cos u chose a single subject-matter and worked on it, but i would have preferred you using FANTASY as your theme. besides, twas a great poem. more grills to your mill
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by realpassion | [ Reply to This ]
      passionate poem...lol...nice i like it...enjoyed readin it
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]


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