damn babe. another piece of art right there. it's so deep and it's just so incredible cause with every word, a person can just think of a memory in there mind where the felt this way. it was intense. so i can't go rambling my love for your work on all your poems, so i'll skip all that drama and stalk you instead.
This poem is full of emotion, it has so much longing for love, and I can see you just spilling out your feelings on this piece of emotional work. I love the live as I ruin love at first sight, yet it concerns me that there has been a relationship that you wanted and it didn't go well and you blame yourself for it...I may be far from wrong, I don't know, but I like also the line that you would go through glass for the feeling...It shows that anyone would do anything for love...this was a wonderful work of art...I love it
I really liked this piece. I didn't feel like I had a right to comment on it. It is so full of emotion that i thought it would be unfair of me to say anything about it. I would just keep reading for the day...but it kept coming to the fore front of my mind so I decided to say...way to put so much raw feeling out there and not be afraid of what others will say about it. I commend you and do not think i have the right to give you stylistic corrections or my point of veiw. it was beautiful and darkly wonderful Briannan.
i really liked this perhaps because i can relate. but aside from that, the format intrigued me and your constant reference to glass was amazing. some thing that threw me off was the verse that began with a lot of "I"s, perhaps try revising the beginnings of the lines to fit in with the rest of verses. also, this peice was entitled "behind tiny glass peices." maybe i read too far into that because near the end of the peice it seemed to me like you were a mirror, cracking but not entirely in peices (..yet) but that you had to stay whole to keep the imaged traced inside of you. i also wondered what "As I ruin love at first sight" meant but im guessing that it may be a personal reference. anyway. i REALLY liked this peice and it hit my heart a bit more sharply than i would like. (oh look im bleeding..) -PEACE and LOVE to you. -therandomthing