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    dots Submission Name: Behind Tiny Glass Peicesdots

    Author: LoveToHateMe
    ASL Info:    20/girl/Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 175/148/42
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBehind Tiny Glass Peicesdots

    How much could I love you?
    I still donít know what to say.
    Iíd crawl through glass to reach you,
    Öbecause Iíve never felt this way.

    So I Ö
    still try to be that perfect picture
    As I ruin this love at first sight.
    Because you only saw a dark silhouette.
    It all seemed so perfect against a white light.

    But IÖ
    canít be someoneís work of art
    while I give up everything to try.
    Iím filled with beauty hiding somewhere.
    It must be beneath the dust inside.

    But IÖ
    canít expect more from nothing
    When Iíve placed tiny mirrors in my eyes.
    Reflecting this false sparkle
    While searching for the other side.

    So IÖ
    trace an image of you sharply
    As you seep through cracks that line my skin.
    You will be scarred in me forever
    And Iíll carve it so deep inÖ

    And IÖ
    still scrape through all my words
    When I know what I want to say.
    While I shatter glass to reach you,
    Öbecause Iíve never felt this way.

    Submitted on 2006-10-10 08:24:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      damn babe. another piece of art right there. it's so deep and it's just so incredible cause with every word, a person can just think of a memory in there mind where the felt this way. it was intense. so i can't go rambling my love for your work on all your poems, so i'll skip all that drama and stalk you instead.

    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW. I love the emotion you portray in this poem. Very dark and deep. I love it. I wonder why hardly anyone has comment!

    "I trace an image of you sharply
    As you seep through cracks that line my skin.
    You will be scarred in me forever
    And Iíll carve it so deep in."

    I know exactly what that is like. SO many a time I've done it myself. I love the visual you give in that stanza. Very good. :)


    | Posted on 2006-11-08 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      And you say that mine made you almost cry.
    This piece. I know exactly what you mean. You have expressed yourself beautifully. Just. Oh my god. It is lovely
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is full of emotion, it has so much longing for love, and I can see you just spilling out your feelings on this piece of emotional work. I love the live as I ruin love at first sight, yet it concerns me that there has been a relationship that you wanted and it didn't go well and you blame yourself for it...I may be far from wrong, I don't know, but I like also the line that you would go through glass for the feeling...It shows that anyone would do anything for love...this was a wonderful work of art...I love it
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      I almost cried. I can't comment right now. Too emotional to find words.
    It's like every part of this scratched open another scab.
    It's perfect.

    I'll be back.

    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this piece. I didn't feel like I had a right to comment on it. It is so full of emotion that i thought it would be unfair of me to say anything about it. I would just keep reading for the day...but it kept coming to the fore front of my mind so I decided to say...way to put so much raw feeling out there and not be afraid of what others will say about it. I commend you and do not think i have the right to give you stylistic corrections or my point of veiw. it was beautiful and darkly wonderful
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this perhaps because i can relate. but aside from that, the format intrigued me and your constant reference to glass was amazing. some thing that threw me off was the verse that began with a lot of "I"s, perhaps try revising the beginnings of the lines to fit in with the rest of verses. also, this peice was entitled "behind tiny glass peices." maybe i read too far into that because near the end of the peice it seemed to me like you were a mirror, cracking but not entirely in peices (..yet) but that you had to stay whole to keep the imaged traced inside of you. i also wondered what "As I ruin love at first sight" meant but im guessing that it may be a personal reference. anyway. i REALLY liked this peice and it hit my heart a bit more sharply than i would like. (oh look im bleeding..)
    -PEACE and LOVE to you.
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by thehappyfaery | [ Reply to This ]

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