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    dots Submission Name: Freedoms Heroesdots

    Author: adnil
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 514/286/57
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I was at the vetrans hospital the other day with my brother and see all the faces of so many who have fought ,made me remember this piece I had wrote some years back, so I thought I would share it all of you, please let me know what you think

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    dotsFreedoms Heroesdots

    Family's gathered on a clear Sunday morn
    To worship in the house of the Lord
    As evil rode out of the blue skies
    Before the day was end ,many had died

    Grandpa told me the story many of times
    Of what happened on that fateful day
    December Seventh Nineteen Forty-one
    The world forever changed war had begun

    A mighty dragon had awoke a sleeping giant
    Who called his most finest against this foe
    And needing the almighty to be by their side
    After all freedom is more then just pride

    Far to many never again returned home
    Never knew nor saw their victorious parades
    Yet their heroics and heroism will be remembered
    By those who were there and family members

    As well as upon generations to come
    They'll bow in prayers for these sons
    Fought against a tide as strong as any sea
    So the world could unceasingly be free

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      this isa very poignant and powerful piece. it brought tears to my eyes. i am so thankful and elated whenever i think of those men that have given their lives for our freedom. because it always bring back to the One that gave His life for us all....

    great job!

    | Posted on 2012-01-06 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      My dad was a veteran of WWII and his dad of WWI. I wish now that he'd told us more, but he always said you can't understand unless you've been there. Fewer and fewer WWII veterans remain and their experiences are dying with them. Pearl Harbor brought the US into the war and changed the course of history forever. Thank you for sharing this poem of remembrance. Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very beautiful. I loved how you gave detials and made thereader feel they were threre seeing all this take place. Very good wording and flow. I'm glad you found this and posted it. You are right, becaise of these men and women, we are free still to this day. great work Linda!
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
    This is a great write that you showed your true Heart too in giving respect and admiration to the Soldiers of WWII
    My Grandfather fought in that war and before he died in 1981 when I was 13 years old he shared so many touching tales of not only triumph but defeat
    Sadly the World has forgotten the true courage and strength of these mighty soldiers
    I wish schools would teach more of the true heart of the American Soldier during a war that was truly a fight for freedom
    God Bless
    Excellent Job Linda!!!
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Linda, this is very good indeed. It has all the qualities of a top class write. An evocative theme, emotion, sadness, hope, passion and a topic that we all can relate to.

    Very well done indeed.

    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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