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    dots Submission Name: Want Is Foreverdots
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    Author: Sarah J
    ASL Info:    14/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 28/30/37
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1077
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 766



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    dotsWant Is Foreverdots
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    To write a love poem would be a lie
    Love poems are temporary
    Unlike the everlasting vows
    Written inside of them
    Writing a love poem
    In ode of something that wont forever be
    Is takeing pictures of
    Wilting flowers
    Capturing beauty at first shot
    But as days go by
    Turning into something shriveled
    Why write something when
    It really is for someone else?
    Its given though as something
    To compromise for your
    Undying sense of loss or want
    Lies, all of it
    But no one takes it for what it is
    The feeling of convincing yourself
    Of your love for someone
    Not really love in truth
    Only the guilded cover of
    Your wooden heart




    Submitted on 2006-10-10 17:51:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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