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    dots Submission Name: **DayDreamdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 534
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    Bytes: 503



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       Another soemthing I wrote in science class. That's where I write most of my stuff lately. I was totally daydreaming and ya, so here it is. Bash it please.


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    dots**DayDreamdots
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    Far away from this place
    Which tries to strenghten my brain
    But I'm gone from reality
    And lost in a dream world
    Where my cares float along
    Not willing to enter my mind
    I float over oceans
    And clouds and trees
    Sit in blowing fields
    And hold hands with him
    Only this place in my head
    Is easily disturbed when
    My name is called
    My mind awakens
    For only a moment
    Until my head rests again




    Submitted on 2006-10-10 17:54:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very interesting.. I do this often no matter where I may be, thinking about things, mind floating above the clouds so to speak and until someone calls me out of the state I stay there ha ha.. I enjoyed this.. will look for more of your writes later :)... penny
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another interesting and good write from you Caotic
    To me this write speaks a very strong truth
    Too many parents are leaving it up to the schools to bring up their children
    I believe this is so wrong
    Children need the helping hands and Loving Hearts of their parents now more then ever before
    I believe this is one of the reasons so many children are experimenting with drugs and a lot of our young citizens are becoming pregnant and so forth
    I find this truly sad
    Thank You for sharing this important write
    I Hope some parents who despertly neeed to see these words do so
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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