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    dots Submission Name: Welcomedots
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    Author: XpLiCiTKRiSiS
    Elite Ratio:    1.03 - 3/23/20
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 654
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just trying to be a little different with my style. This work is completely different from what I have posted previously.


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    dotsWelcomedots
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    Welcome to my hell
    Come take a look
    It's my hotel
    I often take a visit and I hear the bell
    It rings at night, it keeps me up
    I can't stand to fight
    I take a look in the mirror
    I see her face, and I run in fear
    I bleed the black from her face
    That God awful smell that I can taste
    I look up in the sky and I see my life
    I see my wrist and I see the knife
    I go back inside to see the bride
    I see her vale and I see she died
    White once innocent turned into new
    It turned bloody red, and I see you
    I wake up from the dream and I see a blur
    Can't see where I've been, nothing's for sure
    I see the reaper and I see his wife
    They're just so perfect, they make life
    The dreams a reality and I have the knife
    I slit both their throats and laugh real loud
    In love and death that they both vowed
    And to hell they burn with the rest of the crowd




    Submitted on 2006-10-10 18:15:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cool poem keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by Cara R.D | [ Reply to This ]


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