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    dots Submission Name: A feardots
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    Author: javajunkie
    ASL Info:    21/F/ WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 29/29/25
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 638
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    Bytes: 648



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    dotsA feardots
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    Sitting in a chair by the window
    A look on her face
    One of I dare you to come
    Her eyes they glow
    Ignites a fear inside me

    I take two steps forward
    She smiles a smile
    Her eyes now like fire
    I take a step back
    I clench my heart and soul

    For that what she wants
    I feel like I canít breath
    Her eyes following every move
    Make her go away
    Wake me from this dream

    I canít take it anymore
    Sheís waiting for me
    Bring me to life so I can feel
    Wake me in time so I can breath
    For Iím not hers to keep




    Submitted on 2006-10-10 18:31:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this one to!!!! it dark like u said! but i think it could have been a tad longer!! i duno thats just me though!! nice write though!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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