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Submission Name:
A fear
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Author:
javajunkie
ASL Info:
21/F/ WA
Elite Ratio:
3.24 - 29/29/25
Words:
114
Class/Type:
Poetry/Dark
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A fear
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Sitting in a chair by the window
A look on her face
One of I dare you to come
Her eyes they glow
Ignites a fear inside me
I take two steps forward
She smiles a smile
Her eyes now like fire
I take a step back
I clench my heart and soul
For that what she wants
I feel like I can’t breath
Her eyes following every move
Make her go away
Wake me from this dream
I can’t take it anymore
She’s waiting for me
Bring me to life so I can feel
Wake me in time so I can breath
For I’m not hers to keep
Submitted on 2006-10-10 18:31:33
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i like this one to!!!! it dark like u said! but i think it could have been a tad longer!! i duno thats just me though!! nice write though!
~akaila~
| Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by
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