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    dots Submission Name: Back Stabberdots
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    Author: Star
    ASL Info:    15 F WI
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125/127/42
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/I hate you
    Total Views: 878
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    dotsBack Stabberdots
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    A friend I thought I knew.
    Used to think it was you.
    Stabbed me right in the back,
    That friendship I now lack.

    Revenge is all I seek.
    'Cuz I know that you're weak.
    A rage inside of me,
    Is all it seems to be.

    A grave I won't attend,
    'Cuz I know it's the end.
    Deep inside I feel torn.
    Your death I will not mourn.

    Evil dwells inside me.
    Never letting me be.
    Torn apart from this rage.
    Stuck in an iron cage.




    Submitted on 2006-10-10 19:21:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey gurl is this me? i dunno maybe ur mad at me 4 telling me bout zach? i dunno
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this piece, becuz I can really relate to it,.. I had a very good friend for a very long time that in the end, ended up stabbing me in the back.. and I know how it feels to trust someone only to lose all of that.. It was a good
    piece with a lot of emotion, and your feelings really showed through on this one. thanks for sharing it..
    Jules-
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by jules271 | [ Reply to This ]


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