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    dots Submission Name: Vortexdots

    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       This is kind of rough, but I haven't had much time for editing. I wrote it after two of my best friends went overnight from being so close to hating each other. I was just feeling so caught in the middle, and so afraid that I would lose them both.

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    Standing in the center
    of this viscious raging fight,
    I don't know where to turn
    to keep myself upright.

    I stand now surrounded
    by one's venom and one's tears,
    not sure of what to do
    to calm the raging fears.

    How can such pain
    spring overnight,
    from dearest love
    to darkest blight?

    Everyday's a tightrope,
    trying not to fall.
    If I lean to far to one side,
    I know I'll lose it all.

    Submitted on 2006-10-10 22:29:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it works, even though you say it's rough... do you ever compliment yourself? ( ; Everything will work out I hope!
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      says a lot i like this... :) hangin there things will go the way they should..

    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      I like whirlpools and I like to let them take me. Yeehaaaaw

    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]

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