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    dots Submission Name: Never letting go againdots
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    Author: Gothik
    ASL Info:    22 / m / Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 93/132/30
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 199
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 698



    Description:
       This is a poem I wrote on a e-card I sent to the love of my life. I hope you'll like it as much as she did.


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    dotsNever letting go againdots
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    I love you so much.

    If you only knew,
    All what I'll get through,
    Only for a few seconds with you.
    I love and I miss you.

    Only for the smell of your hair,
    Only for those smiles we shared,
    Only for the stars in your eyes,
    That always bring hope to my sides.

    I wish I could hold you deep,
    deep in my arms when I get to sleep,
    This memory I'll always keep,
    Since those toughts needs not to speak.

    I miss you so much,
    I love you so much,
    I shiver on every toughts,
    Forever together as we hoped.


    I never want to lose you again.




    Submitted on 2006-10-10 23:47:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Really sappy neko, kinda like a love song (though not so sappy that's really horrid, just it's sappy.. if that makes any sense) Though it seems kinda sad.. in a "I'm more happy but still sad" sorta way... I'm sorry that this comment sucks but i really have no idea what to say about this.... besides i hope everything works out for neko-san ^_^
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very sweet.

    In terms of rhyming...I'm not so sure how I felt about it. The flow was a little off.

    I like the mentions of the little things that you love so much about a person, but take for granted...the smell of their hair, the way their eyes look, etc.

    All in all, a pretty good poem.
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]



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