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Can't you see

Author: Gothic Misery
ASL Info:    25/F/NV
Elite Ratio:    0.44 - 90 /39 /32
Words: 158
Class/Type: Poetry /
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Can't you see

My eyes were closed and my hole inside growing
The pain of being raped without knowing
Somewhere along the path of life
A man made up his own rules
And in return we all became tools
If only there was a choice
I'd choose never to be born
This life is not mine, it makes me mourn
Can we start over, I'd like to be the person I was meant to be
You don't have to go far, it's not hard to see
That you and me are alike
Stripped from our individuality
Came into this world deaf and blinded
Molded into person who will never find a sense of peace
The pain growing everday never seems to cease
Look at me, a reflection of you
Don't you see, this was never meant to be
It's hard to grasp this pitiful concept
Even so it's still real
And this is something I'll always feel.

Submitted on 2006-10-11 00:09:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  WoW! So deep and that is what I like about this the most. I can understand what yo are all saying. That when you really look at a group of people we are simply all the same, if not that, made into those whom raised us. Its all so simple yet no one really acknowledges it.. great job with explaining yourself.. LOVED IT

| Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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