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    dots Submission Name: Universe in Black and Bluedots
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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 536
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       For my muse...


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    dotsUniverse in Black and Bluedots
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    He set the blue flame on the line,
    A cradle full of fire
    Once upon a frozen time
    Was his deep and dark desire.

    He set it; slowly crawling up
    The blue flame, blue enchanting
    And pouring poison in the cup
    He said: "This is for you, my darling..."

    She never saw that it was black
    Ilusions made it blue
    The snake although, around her neck
    was slowly getting through.

    Her blood so blue, her eyes now dark
    Black, empty, colourless
    Her mind just walking in the park
    Of sorrow, oh so endless.




    Submitted on 2006-10-11 05:14:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I will say that this poem is out there.
    like the poem I wrote called
    *morning Dream*
    It came from my inner poet and I still don't know what is means. I know that not all poems are ment to be understood. But I willl say I like your form and your play with words.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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