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    dots Submission Name: The way it goesdots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 705
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 590



    Description:
       i know there is spellin misstakes in this so dont bother mouning.

    this is the first song i have ever written


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    dotsThe way it goesdots
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    [chorus]
    Why do i have to do this
    Why can't i say no.
    I am my own self
    Thats the way it goes.

    Every day's a new day
    where i have to do my chours
    Mum and dad won't listen
    They'd rather ignore

    [chorus]

    Every lesson's a new one
    from hte moment we walk though the door
    Askin' us all the old stuff
    like why do we snore.

    [chorus]
    Thats the way it goes.




    Submitted on 2006-10-11 05:15:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice, but where's all the verses gone, lol. Very short though, if you write it again I think it would be better if you extended it, anyway, good job.
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the flow of this one. I figure this to be kind of a song like "Only in Dreams" by Weezer. It's probably more about the message and the music than the lyrics. Personally, it's my favorite song, because it's so well done with the music and the message. This is missing half of that, so I can't say how well this would be without the music. Simply wonderful in it's simplicity.

    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a super short song.
    I like the flow of it though.
    Most songs have hiccups, but yours doesn't.
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]


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