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    dots Submission Name: MonoDiaLogs (Part 1)dots
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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 395
    Class/Type: Prose/Gothic
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       The mansion of my soul...


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    dotsMonoDiaLogs (Part 1)dots
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    -That spot of a dark red light, is it...
    -My blood. My life running away from its window.
    -But the light Ė
    -Only ilusions of this damned mansion... I canít remember where...
    -Where?
    -Nowhere. I canít find it.
    -Maybe youíre looking at the wrong light. Youíre looking only at that
    stupid, dark red, WRONG light...
    -Itís my blood, I thought... I thought Iíll never see it and yet...
    -You canít see, you are-
    -Blind. How did this happen? If I only could remember where...
    -Sssh. The flames. They are around... waiting, I can see them glancing-
    -At my eyes. Maybe that is the reason I am...
    -Blind. Blink. Youíre eyes are wounded. I canít see your...
    -Tears. Why? I think Iím lost. I donít know... when was the last time
    Iíve entered...
    -Through a door? Youíve been going along these walls for ages... Do
    you...
    -I see.
    -No.
    -I remember seeing once. But only walls. I never really... saw anything
    else.
    -You was always...
    -Blind.
    -And now the light.
    -The dark red light. Do you think I should...
    -Follow it.
    -But the flames...
    -Your eyes are wounded anyway.
    -My tears. Where...
    -Follow it.
    -Iím afraid I might loose my eyes forever. The light Ė I thought,... I
    thought it is my blood Ė the life I was looking
    -For? For what? You canít look, youíre not even able to see... But...
    -How did I get here? Where was the door? I remember...
    -Going through the flames might bring you to the next...
    -Door. But I see only walls... And Iím sure that beyond the next
    door... there too, will be...
    -Only walls. Your eyes canít see anything but walls. They are...
    -Wounded. I know that I had them once, my tears. If only I could
    remember where...
    -Close your eyes, child.
    -Itís late.
    -For you.
    -To go through the flames?
    -You already did. Now itís too late.
    -For?
    -You.
    -I see.
    -No...
    -Iím already beyond the second door...
    -And still walls.
    -But the flames are now everywhere... I really need my...
    -Tears; let your eyes rest, close them.
    -I need my eyelids...
    -Youíre blind anyway.
    -And still walls. Only walls... and flames... and my reflection in
    them.
    -Only ilusions of this dark mansion. You are blind. Now close your
    eyes...




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