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    dots Submission Name: thoughtsdots
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    Author: UnspokenDreamer
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 542/753/205
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 104
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    Bytes: 1182



    Description:
       Just some randomness.


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    Consciously unconscious, at least to reality.

    I wonder who was hired to sharpen the edge of a moment... I guess they deserve a raise because nothing ever cut so deep. I wish I could become that random log, floating down a beautiful river. I'd like to keep my eyes though, beauty comes in a different shade when you're blind. The colors of autumn make me think of long walks, and blowing leaves, with a sunset in the distance gently warming my cheeks but conveniently missing my nose and fingertips. You might say, I always get like this. Some call it hopeless romantic, I call it a plague. Haha, not really, but its not easy to want to fall in love. It hurts more to care, never forget that. Sorry to mingle random expressions that few will understand with random thoughts that even baffle the mind they escape from, but I think its should be stated. I don't understand why girls love diamonds. I just don't get it. Add that up like a simple algebraic equation, exept divide the answer by two, and multiply that number by the value of "x", which represents how many sentences ago i should have stopped typing and gone to class. Farewell.




    Submitted on 2006-10-11 08:24:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First, let me say that this 'random ramble' or unconcious/concious thought you've written, it's excellent.

    Beauty is surely in the eye of the beholder, and I'll always believe that, and yes, it does come in different shades when you're blind, but sometimes we see....but we aren't really looking. I try looking with my heart, other than my eyes at times, because vanity and other 'worldly' thoughts and things seem to stain and tarnish the true being, the true meaning of things. It's amazing how drowning oneself in the Lord can make one see, without even having to look. It's just unfortunate that I couldn't have learned that sooner.

    Why do girls like diamonds? Honestly....I couldn't tell you that, I myself prefer emeralds, I love the way the deep green seems to entrance and sparkle just enough, but makes you look deeper to see the true beauty of the stone. I guess you could say it's somewhat how I am, and who I am. Maybe that's why I like it so much. Some girls enjoy diamonds because of what they represent, ie: love/marriage/commitment.....but, at least from my point of view, those are the kinds of girls that are superficial and materialistic...it's not the 'meaning' of it all, it's merely what other people percieve it...and to me, that's not worth it.

    My favorite line, was your opening....

    'I wonder who was hired to sharpen the edge of a moment?'

    'I guess they deserve a raise because nothing ever cut so deep'


    Those two lines held onto me through the whole piece. I can't say I know exactly what you were thinking, but I can tell you what it says to me...and how I interpreted this?

    Love is probably the deepest cut we'll feel in our lifetimes...other than death. And I can say, from past experience...loving, losing etc... That even though we think we're in control, there's a stick thrown in the path, and we trip, fall and get cut...bruised and such.

    I guess we have to all learn to either forgive and push aside faults, see past things that have tarnished ones reputation? Or let go. And that's probably the hardest thing in the world to do...because again, we are only human, born sinners, saved by one mans death so that we could live on.

    This piece really made me think, and I have to say even got me a little confused...

    I loved this.


    In the blink of an eye,

    Sorrel
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]
      Is it weird that some of this made me happy?
    There's nothing I love more than your random thoughts (well, besides my dog).
    Your mind is fascinating.

    "I wonder who was hired to sharpen the edge of a moment... I guess they deserve a raise because nothing ever cut so deep."

    That is one of the prettiest things I've ever read.
    I wish I was wise enough to think of things like that.

    "beauty comes in a different shade when you're blind"

    That's so true.
    But do you think there's anything wrong with people who find beauty in only dark, disturbing things? "Normal" pretty stuff gives me a very bad feeling.

    "Some call it hopeless romantic, I call it a plague."

    You say "not really," but I say it's true. I couldn't agree with that line any more.

    "its not easy to want to fall in love."

    I guess you're right, but as much as I hate love, I still want it.

    "I don't understand why girls love diamonds."

    Neither do I... because I think I love them for different reasons than other people do.

    "Add that up like a simple algebraic equation, exept divide the answer by two, and multiply that number by the value of "x", which represents how many sentences ago i should have stopped typing and gone to class."

    Haha That started out so confusing, but you are too funny.

    Whether you intended to or not, thanks for making me laugh


    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]



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