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love,loss,a new relationship

Author: stormkrow
ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
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Words: 113
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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this was Benz before he died I had him write short poems about his life
and this is what I got from him sorry that it took me FOREVER TO POST AGAIN but I am still grieving so please bear with me on this

love,loss,a new relationship


I normally don't say I love you
when I do I mean it
so if you'll stay with me through my termoil
Iwill do anything for you
I will always and forever love you


I lost my first love to suicide
I lost my second love to jealousy
I don't want to lose you


I am looking for someone
to be there for me when i need them
I am looking for someone to care
I am looking for someone to hold me when I cry
I am looking for some one like you.

Submitted on 2006-10-11 12:53:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow, this is heart breaking. It would have been a little less sad under different circumstances, but I guess that's life.
I admire you for taking the stress to post this, even if it was a while -a long ass time ago- back.
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