if this is writtren for a catharsis effect.. its cool and it def lets your emitions out on paper. this is the kind of writing that lets you sort this out.. but it has some gramaticla errors and some repetitions that dont really work well... if you want to do re-writes.. let me know and i will point them out, but if it is just to share.. then good luck with the boy!!
I can't say I relate, but I do like the sorrow in your poem. It makes me forget mine. If he doesn't love you and you love him, then maybe you should just let him go. I for one do not know what I would do in a situation like that. Katana
I believe that every girl has had this feeling. This is therefore very relatable. That is always a great quality. I like the wording and format. It made the piece really easy to read. The rhymimg helped as well. I can't find anything wrong with it. Keep writing! LeAnna