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    dots Submission Name: Fade Innocence, Transparent Fiberdots
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    Author: etheariac
    ASL Info:    17/f/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 75/91/36
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 75
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 569



    Description:
       This is about harsh reality, and how getting woken up from your dreams is a part of growing up.


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    dotsFade Innocence, Transparent Fiberdots
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    I'm awakened by the sound of an asphalt cheek,

    scraping sleepily away

    the sidewalk chalk


    sinking like a stone

    leaving impressions
    on the mattress

    lace curtain
    bleached
    deceasing by the broadness

    of the sun



    question
    coarse
    intrusion,
    rough and tumble,
    cut in half

    jagged path divides the truth
    love
    we constructed
    in slumber






    Submitted on 2006-10-11 22:44:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a vert good write filled with emotion and also this write creates quite a vision in my mind
    Halfway through this write I visualized a young woman crying her eyes out as she realized the Man she Loves is getting in the way of Her moving forward in Life and he also is creating many obstacles that are hard for her to break through
    Very Well Written
    I look forward to reading more new writes from you
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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