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    dots Submission Name: When you Traveldots

    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       I dont know Im not so good with the happy pieces I write...

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    dotsWhen you Traveldots

    I will walk softly
    just far enough behind
    simply watching you climb

    you may not see me
    or hear my foot falls
    but I'll be there
    should you need me

    so when you travel
    though the night is here
    know your never alone

    I'm always with you
    even when not at your side
    so let down your guard
    my sweet darling

    one eyes always watching
    when you think I'm asleep
    I'll keep you safe
    in this heart

    When you can't run
    you wont have to crawl
    I'll carry you
    with these arms of mine

    I'll walk softly
    just a few steps behind
    but should you need me
    expect me swiftly
    my sweet darling

    Submitted on 2006-10-11 23:35:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is so tender and beautiful john...

    i was just having a conversation earlier tonight about how no one seems to write nice things... you know... happy stuff... i cant make happy sound uncliché... you know...? and its crazy coz happy should be what life is all about and yet it is pain that provokes the best poetry...


    this is beautiful...
    i think i needed a someone like this for while i was off travelling and all...
    thinking about a supposed response to this piece if it were aimed at me...
    did you ever hear that poem thingee

    dont walk behind me - i may not lead
    dont walk infront of me - i may not follow
    just walk beside me and be my friend

    its really bashed and smashed but i think it would be a beautiful response to a beautiful piece...

    but then... sometimes we gotta think we're doing this alone you know... even if we're not alone we gotta think like we are... like we are accomplishing something through no other efforts but our own (regardless of the fact that we have people holding us up as we do it and cheering us on and all..)

    i think i especially like the bit about sleeping...
    i dont sleep coz im always trying to stay awake and protect everyone and sometimes i think what if someone else stayed awake...?
    even though there is no longer any danger and no reason at all for me not to sleep.. there are no domestics and no arguments... i guess ive grown used to not sleeping... but sometimes... yeah...

    this is really beautiful john...
    so very very beautiful

    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      as usual you take my breathe a3way i think its because...when i read your work....it seems swo personal to the extent of who ever reads it could see it being written to them....and knowing you....well thinking i know you well enough....i could see you writing something like this....its romantic and soft and if someone i was dating had given me something like this...lol...i can dream right...your words always make me smile...ange
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]

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