Compassion

Author: mrmundane ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 47 /96 /78 Words: 90

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Compassion

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Does she know nothing Everything I ever knew So Black Night for everyday Every year I've fought back so long i am so far lost How will she ever find me How long 'til one gives up Life has given me so many false hopes I'm Teased To the limit Every bastard who ever broke me down Found so much happiness I was such a fool To be an Optomist The world is one big lesson That it's foolish To give compassion And I was so damn compassionate

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"I was such a fool To be an Optimist" Yeah, nothing good can come from that... except the fact that you now know what not to be. You know what they say: Losing all hope is freedom. (Well, I don't know if "they" say it, but the guy in Fight Club does.) I really like this. You're talent has always fascinated me. -nikkki

| Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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