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Did You Feel It??


Author: WaxingPoetic
ASL Info:    27 ~ Louisiana
Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 493 /563 /100
Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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First thing I've written in a really long time. Just puttin it out there. It's short just like me


Did You Feel It??



Asphyxiation.
Did you feel it?
When you said the words
That killed me,
Did you feel it?
Like a hand on my throat,
You cleared the passage to my heart.
Love stopped flowing
When you said the words...
Did you feel it?




Submitted on 2006-10-12 03:40:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this write
Though it is short your words speak great depth
To me though some may think this write has sexual overtones I do not
I believe you were referring to a soulmate asking you if you feel The Love he feels so much for you
Great Job
I look forward to reading more new writes from you
God Bless
Ron

Please if you have a chance I just added 2 new writes too my page can you Please let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, if it cleared the passage to your heart why would love stop flowing... I'm not sure I get that contradiction. I like the premise of this and it gives great imagery. My husband suffocated our love with his words for years until it just died of asphyxiation (good word). I felt ya on this!
| Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by kiddo13 | [ Reply to This ]


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