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    dots Submission Name: Words of the Forgoten Sword Fighter.dots
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    Author: D.C.M.
    ASL Info:    18/M/TN.
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 73/110/77
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 844
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 395



    Description:
       Something I just sat down and typed, it needs some work, and I'll revise it later probably. But tell me what you think of the idea.


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    dotsWords of the Forgoten Sword Fighter.dots
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    Sword fighters come from all around.
    To see this brave man fight.
    To there surprise the man goes down.
    With out a fight!
    He spoke with his last breath.
    "I really just don't care! But tell my love I miss her!"
    With his last breath he disapered.
    Gone out, with his blade.
    Now who was his love?
    The world may never know.




    Submitted on 2006-10-12 07:17:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this kinda made me wonder all sorts of things. why wasnt his love at the fight? did she betray him? and why did he give up? what happened to make him stop caring? very good and awesomely written. kudos.

    ~Max
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by Max R. | [ Reply to This ]
      an odd ending. i wonder why he went down w/o a fight. sounds like a wonderful story idea and if it were a poem, interesting.
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it is a pretty cool poem. A good short story with a nice end. It sounds like a good idea for a book. I look forward to more of your work.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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