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    dots Submission Name: A World Gone Wrongdots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1009
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       It's not completeley clear, even to me, why I wrote it. But it's here, and now you're about to read it.


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    dotsA World Gone Wrongdots
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    Pieces
    Of the whole are scattered to the wind.
    And are lost to time and memory,
    Are known no more and live on in forgetfulness.
    And will forever be remembered by those with no memory.

    Shattered
    By a tender hand,
    Is the whole melting away?
    Torn asunder by the hate of itself.
    Or was it already dead?

    Nothing
    Itself was right with the world,
    Or with it's people,
    And ever in it's exsisitence,
    Did it deserve this?

    Void
    By all acounts.
    It's not even worth the time and effort,
    Or the blood and tears,
    To remain happy and alive.

    Memories
    Are all that remain,
    But are easily done away with and forgotten.
    Replaced by the stupid little nothings,
    That people thrive on.




    Submitted on 2006-10-12 11:23:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Depressed much??? Or am I reading this the wrong way? OH boy, must remember to send you some jello cookies. Great stuff. The cookies. No wait, I mean the poem....no...grrr, I hate it when my toungue get's all tangled. Great stuff period. Again your style does not fail you. Talent is quite a transparent thing but it's so noticable. Is that an oxymoron or am I a moron. That rhymes. In a stupid way. Make me shut up.
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem.
    I like how you take one word and branch off with it. I know the idea of the poem is how the world sucks, which is true, yet not. Depends on your situation in life. Mine is good at the moment. lol
    But this poem was very easy to read because of the idea. I didn't have to re-read anything, which I have had to do on othersites. Your style is definitely unique my friend.

    ~Strator
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by Strator | [ Reply to This ]


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