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    dots Submission Name: Bitter Seductiondots
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    Author: jinx
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 44/58/26
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 138
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    Bytes: 725



    Description:
       this is about a guy at school (whoa, teen angst), who i don't like one bit, but when i see him, i totally want him anyway. and i want that to stop.


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    Stop being so crystalline,
    Stop being so fluid, so flawless.
    Stop being so composed.
    And stop being so run-your-fingers-through-your-hair wonderful,
    With that unravished quietness
    That you call apathy.
    Stop fixing me with that iridescent stare
    Which draws me in; rapturously,
    And strips away my composure.
    Stop smiling that venomously enticing smile.
    Stop moving so detatchedly, like you could step back and conduct
    The way this hallway dances-
    The way this hallway courses through me.
    I'm truly sick of your bitter seduction,
    And I've never been more furious
    Because you're not even doing it on purpose.




    Submitted on 2006-10-12 11:56:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah, every girl has felt this way, especially me since I was always (and still is) one of the boys...Sadly to say however it is cliché, the whole super-hot, flawless guy who seduces girl with a smile and don't even realize it. Someone people have it easy.

    It was teen angsty, but you're probably hearing nothing new from what Briannan told you.

    Stop fixing me with that iridescent stare
    Which draws me in; rapturously,
    And strips away my composure.
    Stop smiling that venomously enticing smile.

    You always feel this, yet this is the first time I've seen a good description put into words.

    And I've never been more furious
    Because you're not even doing it on purpose.

    Don't you just hate that? Good read.
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      I bet every girl has felt this way about at least one boy. You are right it is teen angsty, but you did it very well. I liked how you described this guy, but, sadly, it could be any rebel loner from a teen comedy from the '80's, sorry to say. It is a bit clichéd, not to say I haven't had this feeling before, the I utterly despise you but want to be with you for some unknown reason. I thank you for the share. I like the way it was written.
    Briannan
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]



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