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    dots Submission Name: *Who Shall It Be?dots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       this poem kinda sucks so do the title...i wrote it during history class...i like the idea behide it if u have any suggestions on how to make it better let me know thanx

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    dots*Who Shall It Be?dots

    looking 'round the room
    searching for my next victim
    a guy with glasses-too typical
    an indian-let's not be racist
    hmm...i need someone original
    the slut? no, i picked on her last week
    nerds puh-lease so last year
    geeks geeks geeks
    class clowns
    the quiet one
    yes thats it
    she'll be easy, raped last year
    hasn't uttered a word since
    she shutters when i look her way
    and avoids my evil stares
    the bell rings, time to take action
    "Hey you!" i yell afetr her

    Submitted on 2006-10-12 14:20:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wait...What is Ronswords on about? Is he commenting on the same poem i am??
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by RichieHM | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh from the eyes of a bully what a weird perspective. although I have written a piece form the perspective of the over the edge bully-ee before (my next post i think)
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by ShadowedAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good, it has deep meaning and it's really creative. I would pretty much say what the person beneath me has said. This poem shows lack of respect shown towards others and how men would easily use someone they think is an easy target for sex.

    Keep writing you have talent

    Linzi xx
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by Linzi | [ Reply to This ]
      This is deep
    I love how you wrote this from a sick males point of view
    That was creative and If I didnt know you like I do I would have thought this was written by a male
    You speak truth in this
    Way too many people are eager for just sex and so on instead of what true Love really is a companion for friendship
    Probably one of the biggest reasons Im 37 and have never been in Love in a relationship before
    Excellent Work
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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