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    dots Submission Name: *Take Away My Paindots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 603
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 415

       written in history class again.. in my opinion this one is better thn the others but still not one of my best...

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    dots*Take Away My Paindots

    take away my pain
    throw it out the window
    make me reborn
    by your tender words
    soft caresses
    and deep looks of affection
    you're the one for i want to be with
    i get butterflies in my stomache
    and frogs in my throat
    everytime i see you i get excited all over again
    as if it was the first time
    and i asked you
    to take away my pain

    Submitted on 2006-10-12 14:34:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Love or lust? Does not matter. What feeling you have in your writing! Great poem!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. its short and sweet. you brought it full circle back to the first line. impressive indeed. good word choice, good flow. you dont dissappoint your readers. if you've got stuff thats better than this and its not on here, then get it on here. this is great stuff. keep on writing and keep on rocking.
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]

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