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    dots Submission Name: Lifedots

    Author: Pprophet
    ASL Info:    19/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 91/12/9
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 761
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1197

       Something I wrote along time ago... Also my first post here. :]

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    a plethora of irrational acts intervene A designated path of destruction
    written word used to discuss symmetrics compared from ours to my pain you feel without touching
    auxiliary offered from the constituent forces assembled, for subordinate was my theme
    vulgur slurs thrown directly directed at anyone involved for the mood, just releasin steam
    becuase of that, contracted a negetive image, A lethal injection of photo ink not to be suspected
    socially vacinated, persevere and prevail, actions "plotted"- like procrastination but my thoughts were collected
    never to be forgotten worded memorial servies the technique to optimize an empiric
    charlatan, a level I destined to never achieve, engraved to a rumor I needed to appear it
    piece of concious released currently channled through a voluble output, volume maximized
    self revolt, misplaced the nerve, life paralysis created, emotions flowed faced back to the tide
    massive continuum of the arbitrary art involved to the birth of intelectual deception
    misguided intentions come included as it weighs on your mind, the strength test I stand for a correction...

    Submitted on 2006-10-12 21:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      LOL, oh god. I aint laughing at you, just wondering how many people read this and were completely lost. You deffinately got a vocabulary, that's for damn [censored]in' sure. I actaully had to pay attention, doesn't happen often, so i enjoy when it does. However, the "big words" might discourage an array of readers, alot of people don't wanna habve to try to enjoy something. and don't like feeling stupid cause they don't get it. Now, i aint one to lower my vocab for others, but bare in mind if people can't understand, they probabily wont read it. simple fact. I like this, I'm gonna read it a couple more times, nice man, props to you, deffinate props!
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]

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