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    dots Submission Name: Truth Be Tolddots

    Author: Pprophet
    ASL Info:    19/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 91/12/9
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 955
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 641


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    dotsTruth Be Tolddots

    phrases construed, perception of depth scrutinized
    image of self indulgence mirriored, miracles commence before my eyes
    fathom the autocracy that effectuates the mortal soul
    never to descend I thought, but now more than whole
    forever endulged, if not for the pain of no participation
    possessed as a mobile massacre, I credit the part your takin
    never divulge the virgin intentions, a service required
    postulate only your company, for all else I'm tired
    yesterday broke forevers monotony, though lonely today
    fresh tears suture dreams to reality, a heart on display.

    Submitted on 2006-10-12 21:47:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Im going to have to say it was good. Sorry to not be like a broken record with "wows". You write with an outstanding vocabulary, I'll give you that. It's nice to read something that requires intellect. Congrats. I know if i tried to use too many big words... I'd make a fool of myself.

    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this was powerful. It just seethed with ''longging to be'' vibes. I loved it. I would have like to have seen the poem more orginized than in a little paragraph but that diddn't take anything away from the poem iteslf. Awsome work ~ The Forsaken One ~
    | Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by The_Forsaken1 | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks for your comment on advocators of annihilation, and when you suggested it was the same style of writing as yours i decided to check out your featured piece. which by the way is a new favorite of mine, and i do see the similarities between our writing style. but your choice of vocabulary in this was perfect, and i really enjoyed your sense of rhyme. take it easy

    - kase
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      woooow.....this was brilliant; I've not read such a powerful write in far too long; this is the kind of write I joined ES to read, and sadly it's few and far between anymore. you're an amazing writer and I don't think I've EVER thought that about someone after one read, wow I am SO glad you joined ES the only thing i Have to say is it could have been a bit more colorful and image filled, also the format you had it in made it a little hard to totally pay attention but at the same time I wanted to pay all of my attention because you had a lot of power in what you said. This was a beautiful write in such a way that it didnt' let the reader just daze through it and not think, it almost dared me to give my own meaning to what you were saying and, especially for such a relativly shot write, it gave me A LOT to think about. I loved this so much, definatly adding it to my faves, keep writing; I look forward to reading a lot more of your stuff
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very powerful read. The last line is my favorite, "fresh tears suture dreams to reality, a heart on display." WOW! Is the olny real word to describe it. Keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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