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    dots Submission Name: Sever my tiesdots
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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 328
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 973
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    Description:
       fianlly i have freed myself from all the damn burden with my once and former lover. i'm done with her lies, with her excuses, and i'm done with her control over me.this song is for you danielle. i'm sry things had to turn out like this but it's all your own UNdoing.


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    dotsSever my tiesdots
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    Intro: ever huanted by the trapings of this life, i am left to desiced if i should sever all our ties...



    to this day i believe,
    you were bold and ready to decide,
    what to do with my life,

    to tear me from the inside out,
    was your goal all this time,
    until i saught out devotion,

    i only wanted the best for you,
    now it's clear what i must do...

    (chorus)

    after all that you've stolen from me,
    i know what i must do,
    to tear to shred all my ties with you,

    no matter how much it hurts,
    now i know that i'll heal inside,
    this is it-it's not the end of time,

    (screaming)
    IT'S ONLY MY END WITH YOU!

    (end)

    burn the pictures,
    along with my memory,
    only to alow myself to be free,

    change myself for you,
    i'd rather just die,
    than to listen to you lie,


    (chorus)

    after all that you've stolen from me,
    i know what i must do,
    to tear to shred all my ties with you,

    no matter how much it hurts,
    now i know that i'll heal inside,
    this is it-it's not the end of time,

    (screaming)
    IT'S ONLY MY END WITH YOU!

    MY END WITH YOU...

    MY END WITH YOU!!!

    (end)

    so go-away,
    leave me-alone,
    it's not-your way,
    your lips-are sown,

    (screaming)
    NEVER TO SPEAK ANOTHER LIE!!!


    (chorus)

    after all that you've stolen from me,
    i know what i must do,
    to tear to shred all my ties with you,

    no matter how much it hurts,
    now i know that i'll heal inside,
    this is it-it's not the end of time,

    (screaming)
    IT'S ONLY MY END WITH YOU!
    I KNOW NOW WHAT I MUST DO!
    MY TIME WITH YOU IS THROUGH,
    I MUST SEVER MY TIES...

    WITH YOU!!!!





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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a pretty entertaining read actually.

    I didn't find it to be angry at all actually, it appeared to be more of an.. "upbeat" released piece.
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by Pprophet | [ Reply to This ]
      Much better, not because it is angry, but because it is more sophisticated. It is more up to parr with what you usually do. I like this song. It is something that everyone can relate to. Thank you for the read.
    Briannan
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]
      Angry? Sad? Both? ...i dont know, but this was good

    "this is it-it's not the end of time,

    (screaming)
    IT'S ONLY MY END WITH YOU!"

    That was my favorite part. I could imagine what it would sound like and i loved it.

    "burn the pictures,
    along with my memory,"

    I like that too. Hopefully the memory can be burned.
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]


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