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    dots Submission Name: Love isdots
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    Author: James Reyna
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 227/166/24
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I wrote this poem after the wedding of my cousin to his wife and I had always written about love through my perspective but never through the perspective of a just married couple I hope you like it and will comment it


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    dotsLove isdots
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    Love is
    And love will be
    The tie that binds us
    Eternally
    Within our hearts
    Will blossom a song
    The birds cannot sing
    Nor hum along
    For they can't feel
    The love we possess
    And though it is so real
    What is reality after this?
    After we held hands
    And walked the aisle
    Exchanged wedding bands
    And danced for miles
    What is reality?
    After this
    This must truly be
    What love is.




    Submitted on 2006-10-13 09:07:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love is so hard to define. Don't you think? But when we have the opportunity to experience it or when we have the choice to observe what love is all about such as the wedding you attended, you get a better understand of what love might be. Marriage is a huge step, well to me it is. There are so many people i've seen married that after a year or two, they cannot take each other anymore and get divorced. But it's the idea of love that got people together in the first place and it's keeping the idea of love that's going to keep people together.

    I like this piece very much although i don't really think the title suits very well. Still, it's a good piece and i enjoyed it very much.
    Sorry I came out of nowhere. i was just browsing through.
    Anyhow, take care...

    Irina
    | Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      thats adorable i love it! keep it up! <3
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      such a beautfully sweet and romantic poem I love it you work is so well expressed and this one touched my heart, you can really capture your own feelings that run deep insaide right throough to the soul thanks for sharing this one .
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so delicious!!
    its sweet, romantic and warm, all the things a good love poem should be. it flows perfectly too!
    you have a great talent,
    great job!!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this perspective of love. I was smiling the whole time I read this. And I believe this is perfect definition for newly weds. But like Kiddo, I can't really say I feel that way about it.

    Good work.

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      Sweet flow, sweet rhyme, sweet outlook on new love when it's fresh and untainted. A bit unrealistic for my jaded perspective, but it is a good write. An easy piece to read and understand. It's sweet that you could see those feelings coming out in the love they shared and recreate that blissful feeling with your words. Nicely done!
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by kiddo13 | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it was good. Good true raw emotion. I've never been married before or had a love deep enough to think of marriage, but I do believe this would probably be a good representation. Awesome job.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so true James
    True Love is what keeps a marraige or a relationship together
    A lot of relationships fail and people wonder why well the reason is there may have been Love but not true Love
    Very well said James
    I like the writes of yours were you express love as a deep powerful personal emotion
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Not too bad for a love poem. I really loved how the lines tied into one another throughout the piece. That takes a little bit of thought and I've found, it often doesn't work. However, I have found at least one exception to that. I just have to say that I'm very impressed by that. Other than that I can't really say too much else, it's definately a love poem.

    It's great that you took the step to look through someone else's eyes to write this piece. I just think that when you started to use 'reality' in this piece, it kind of took away from what you had set up in the beginning. That's just my own personal thought though. Good job!

    Candi
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]


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