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    dots Submission Name: playa- verse 1dots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       let me know what you think so far, ta x


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    dotsplaya- verse 1dots
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    you call me every morning/ just to say that you love me/ but the night before where were you?/ im not blind, i can see/
    i knew you were a playa/ so i should have seen it cummin/ i wanna get away from you/ but me feet just wont start running/
    ive heard about those other girls/ and ive seen you with a few/ ive even read the text messages/ but i still cant get rid of you!




    Submitted on 2006-10-13 12:57:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is pretty good. true too. iono why people in general let themselves be in situations like this....but its always gon be a prollem
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      why are girls blind, or why do they ignore the actions of playas....??

    I like the start of this...its to short to be finished so good luck on finishing it.

    Keep it up

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      it's true for a lot of girls.. just hope it isn't happenin to you right now.. as of right now, it's good.. keep it up
    lizzie
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]


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