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    dots Submission Name: Mind Gamedots

    Author: Pprophet
    ASL Info:    19/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 91/12/9
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 785
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsMind Gamedots

    Escaping the grasp from nostalgias capos, born to my own man
    held down by the gradient descents, rebuked to a conan
    decieve my own lies, with a modified fabrication
    occuring hostile takeovers, you're the chaste invasion
    accumulate humility, but feet still arent touching earth
    golden hearts gurantee nothing,for me i'm still not enough to worth
    private endeavors, encouraged sucide goals in mind
    hope only for you, shimmers my heart, as if gold in mines
    entire experience required as a last straw, passionate distraught
    another mistake commited to, complete with thought

    Wait, Wait...

    clock chimes, something more prevalant to your taste
    instant my name is spoken, Its malevolent to your praise
    nerveous fingers envelope, as it blends dissolution
    erratic behavior, like malfunctioning lighters- cleanse this polution
    discover the face of shadow, never aware though
    don't talk about my life, was educated never let your affairs show
    lack the abilitiy, to comprehend my prolific stature
    faked visable smiles decay daily, Its a mystic plaster
    my mind is a game of chance..
    understand? I only hope you came, an cant...

    Submitted on 2006-10-13 22:06:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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