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    dots Submission Name: The City of a Thousand Lightsdots

    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 89/90/40
    Words: 386
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe City of a Thousand Lightsdots

    Monuments of gleaming steel
    Ascend beyond the skies
    Piercing into the clouds
    A thousand burning lights
    Scattered through the city
    Replacing the sun at day
    And the moon at night
    Creating a purgatory
    No more old ways, and no stories
    Many men are doomed to fade
    Leave their mark then pass away
    Yet the print that they have made
    Is but a laceration upon concrete
    A tattoo that will be gone one day
    Everyone lives their lives
    Euphoric and full of hope
    That one day they will glorify
    All of their achievements
    Reflections of men come and go
    Trying not to disrupt
    The constant flow of people
    A million faces passing by
    All of them avoid my eyes
    Afraid of what could be seen...

    Sitting in my hotel room
    Exhausted from the city
    Am I alive because I breathe
    Or breath because i live?
    Time slowly slips from me
    And the lights flicker off
    So now I sit in darkness
    Unlike those who are outside
    Engulfed in every single light
    Sometimes dark is comfort
    Sometimes dark is peace
    The only time I feel this way
    Is when I want release
    The noise outside rambles on
    A crescendo of busy voices
    Crackles throughout the streets
    Some of them of a great joy
    Some of them of defeat
    Noises that hurt my head
    They make me think too much
    It wasn't like this before
    This coldness to the touch
    The beast of steel watches over us
    Keeping us in line
    Forcing us to be our best
    And revel in this life

    The other night I had a dream
    Turned out to be a memory
    Of self content and sanity
    Peace and quiet; serenity
    Is there something missing here?
    Or is this a useless fear?
    Looking out the window
    Upon my brand new home
    Though surrounded by my peers
    I seem to be alone
    No purpose dwells inside my mind
    No great opportunity
    That is something I must find
    Without a dwelling unity
    This is the world they wanted
    Thus it's what they got
    A light inside is hard to find
    Although it can be bought
    I'll search for a place that I belong
    Admist these temples that self deify
    Perhaps one day I'll fit in
    The city of a thousand lights

    Submitted on 2006-10-14 00:06:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...I really liked this one. Something about the flow of the rhyme scheme just makes it work. Great job. I couldn't help but wonder though...city of lights...paris or vegas? Or somewhere else?
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]

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