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    dots Submission Name: dream of deathdots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    23/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.37 - 62/250/223
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsdream of deathdots
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    this life is not my own
    this life has become a dream
    i will never wake if i cant be alive
    but if i believe i can fly i will survive
    cause dreams are my reality
    when i awake will i know its not a dream
    will i ever awake with my blood on the floor
    the puddle of death underneath me
    spreading further as i dream
    the sleep of death
    the pain of being alive
    i dream as my life slowly fades
    as i dream my last dream i remember my life and surrender what was left of my life




    Submitted on 2006-10-14 04:47:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very deep i like this a lot.. but maybe you could add to it :)

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2006-10-14 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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